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I wrote to you complaining of illness,

كتبت إليكم أشكو سقاما

1. I wrote to you complaining of illness,
My body is visibly wasted with intense longing,

١. كَتَبتُ إِلَيكُمُ أَشكو سَقاماً
بَرى جِسمى مِنَ الشَوقِ الشَديدِ

2. And in a near land I lost my patience,
So how could I be in a far-off land?

٢. وَفي البَلَدِ القَريبِ عَدِمتُ صَبري
فَكيفَ أَكونُ في البَلَدِ البَعيدِ

3. What is the intention after rejection? What is
More intense than intention after rejection?

٣. نَوَىً بَعدَ الصَدودِ وَأَيُّ شَيءٍ
أَشَدُّ مِنَ النَوى بَعدَ الصُدودِ