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I delighted in your radiant poetry

ุชู…ุชุนุช ู…ู† ุดุนุฑูƒ ุงู„ุจุงู‡ุฑ

1. I delighted in your radiant poetry
With its shining, embroidered teacher

ูก. ุชูŽู…ูŽุชู‘ูŽุนุชู ู…ูู† ุดูุนุฑููƒูŽ ุงู„ุจุงู‡ูุฑู
ุจูู…ูุนู„ูŽู…ู ุฏูŠุจุงุฌูู‡ู ุงู„ู†ุงุถูุฑู

2. And I purified my mind in a garden
On the blossoming flower of your vivid words

ูข. ูˆูŽู†ูŽุฒู‘ูŽู‡ุชู ุนูŽู‚ู„ููŠูŽ ููŠ ุฑูŽูˆุถูŽุฉู
ุนูŽู„ู‰ ุฒูŽู‡ุฑู ุฃูŽู„ูุงุธููƒูŽ ุงู„ุฒุงู‡ูุฑู

3. So if you prided my poetry against it
Why donโ€™t you pride yourself on the proud one?

ูฃ. ููŽุฅูู† ุฃูŽู†ุชูŽ ูุงุฎูŽุฑุชูŽ ุดูุนุฑูŠ ุจูู‡ู
ููŽู„ูู…ูŽ ู„ุง ุชููุงุฎูุฑู ุจูุงู„ูุงุฎูุฑู

4. Knit what you were able with his composition
In which there is no verse but only the rare

ูค. ููŽุชูู‡ ู…ุง ุงูุณุชูŽุทูŽุนุชูŽ ุจูู…ูŽู†ุธูˆู…ูู‡ู
ููŽู…ุง ููŠู‡ู ุจูŽูŠุชูŒ ุณููˆู‰ ู†ุงุฏูุฑู

5. As for the proficiency of its similes
And what it contains of current examples

ูฅ. ุฃูŽู…ุง ูˆูŽู…ูŽู„ุงุญูŽุฉู ุชูŽุดุจูŠู‡ูู‡ู
ูˆูŽู…ุง ููŠู‡ู ู…ูู† ู…ูŽุซูŽู„ู ุณุงุฆูุฑู

6. It has surely softened until I imagined it
A breeze after pouring rain

ูฆ. ู„ูŽู‚ูŽุฏ ุฑูŽู‚ู‘ูŽ ุญูŽุชู‘ู‰ ุชูŽูˆูŽู‡ู‘ูŽู…ุชูู‡ู
ู†ูŽุณูŠู…ุงู‹ ุจูุนูŽู‚ุจู ู†ูŽุฏู‰ู‹ ู‚ุงุทูุฑู

7. And your composition has surpassed my composition, so if
I lagged behind you, then pardon me

ูง. ูˆูŽุทูŽุจุนูŽูƒูŽ ู‚ูŽุฏ ูุงุชูŽ ุทูŽุจุนูŠ ููŽุฅูู†
ุชูŽุฃูŽุฎู‘ูŽุฑุชู ุนูŽู†ูƒูŽ ููŽูƒูู† ุนุงุฐูุฑูŠ

8. For none can equal the forerunner when he ran
Hoping my mind would catch up to him

ูจ. ููŽู…ุง ู…ูุซู„ู ุณุงุจูู‚ูู‡ู ุฅูุฐ ุฌูŽุฑู‰
ูŠูุคูŽู…ู‘ูู„ู ุฅูุฏุฑุงูƒูŽู‡ู ุฎุงุทูุฑูŠ