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I have established in love two witnesses:

ุฃู‚ู…ุช ููŠ ุงู„ุญุจ ุดุงู‡ุฏูŠู†

1. I have established in love two witnesses:
The sickness of my body and the tears of my eyes.

ูก. ุฃู‚ู’ู…ุชู ููŠ ุงู„ุญูุจู‘ู ุดุงู‡ูุฏูŽูŠู’ู†ู
ุณูŽู‚ุงู…ูŽ ุฌูุณู’ู…ููŠ ูˆุฏูŽู…ู’ุนูŽ ุนูŽูŠู’ู†ููŠ

2. And here I am swearing an oath,
By a rose above two cheeks.

ูข. ูˆู‡ุง ุฃู†ุง ุญุงู„ูููŒ ูŠูŽู…ูŠู†ุงู‹
ุจููˆูŽุฑู’ุฏูŽุฉู ููŽูˆู‚ูŽ ูˆูŽุฌู’ู†ูŽุชูŽูŠู’ู†ู

3. Jasmine has surrounded it, being warmed
By the softness of a cheek near two lips.

ูฃ. ู‚ุฏ ุญูŽูู‘ูŽู‡ุง ุงู„ูŠุงุณูŽู…ููŠู†ู ุชูุญู’ู…ู‰
ู…ูู†ู’ ุนูุทู’ูู ุตูุฏู’ุบู ุจุนูŽู‚ู’ุฑูŽุจูŽูŠู’ู†ู

4. Your affection is in the core of my heart,
The circumstances of life havenโ€™t changed it.

ูค. ู„ูŽูˆูุฏู‘ููƒู… ููŠ ุตูŽู…ูŠู… ู‚ูŽู„ู’ุจููŠ
ู…ุง ุบูŽูŠู‘ูŽุฑูŽุชู’ู‡ู ุตูุฑูˆูู ุจูŽูŠู’ู†ู

5. So is there for the judge of love a judgment,
That rules what is between you and I?

ูฅ. ููŽู‡ูŽู„ู’ ู„ู‚ุงุถูŠ ุงู„ู‡ูŽูˆู‰ ู…ูŽุถุงุกูŒ
ูŠุญูƒูู…ู ู…ุง ุจูŠู†ูŽูƒูู…ู’ ูˆุจูŽูŠู’ู†ูŠ