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I toiled with my nails and wielded my pickaxe

ูƒุฏุญุช ุจุฃุธูุงุฑูŠ ูˆุฃุนู…ู„ุช ู…ุนูˆู„ูŠ

1. I toiled with my nails and wielded my pickaxe
Only to meet an obstinate, smooth boulder

ูก. ูƒูŽุฏูŽุญุชู ุจูุฃูŽุธูุงุฑูŠ ูˆูŽุฃูŽุนู…ูŽู„ุชู ู…ูุนูˆูŽู„ูŠ
ููŽุตุงุฏูŽูุชู ุฌูู„ู…ูˆุฏุงู‹ ู…ูู†ูŽ ุงู„ุตูŽุฎุฑู ุฃูŽู…ู„ูŽุณุง

2. It turned its face when I came for my need
And hung its head until I said, โ€œItโ€™s dead, or nearly soโ€

ูข. ุชูŽุดุงุบูŽู„ูŽ ู„ูŽู…ู‘ุง ุฌูุฆุชู ููŠ ูˆูŽุฌู‡ู ุญุงุฌูŽุชูŠ
ูˆูŽุฃูŽุทุฑูŽู‚ูŽ ุญูŽุชู‘ู‰ ู‚ูู„ุชู ู‚ูŽุฏ ู…ุงุชูŽ ุฃูŽูˆ ุนูŽุณู‰

3. I was ready to eulogize it when I saw it
Transcending mortal silence, until it sighed

ูฃ. ูˆูŽุฃูŽุฌู…ูŽุนุชู ุฃูŽู† ุฃูŽู†ุนุงู‡ู ุญูŠู†ูŽ ุฑูŽุฃูŽูŠุชูู‡ู
ูŠูŽููˆู‚ู ูููˆุงู‚ูŽ ุงู„ู…ูŽูˆุชู ุญูŽุชู‘ู‰ ุชูŽู†ูŽูู‘ูŽุณุง

4. I said, โ€œItโ€™s alright, I wonโ€™t returnโ€
Whereupon the reptiles spawned over its smooth surface

ูค. ููŽู‚ูู„ุชู ู„ูŽู‡ู ู„ุง ุจูŽุฃุณูŽ ู„ูŽุณุชู ุจูุนุงุฆูุฏู
ููŽุฃูŽูุฑูŽุฎูŽ ุชูŽุนู„ูˆู‡ู ุงู„ุณูŽู…ุงุฏูŠุฑู ู…ูุจู„ูุณุง