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I set out to cross a path none had crossed before,

ุฎุฑุฌุช ุฃุฌุชุงุฒ ู‚ูุฑุง ุบูŠุฑ ู…ุฌุชุงุฒ

1. I set out to cross a path none had crossed before,
When I was met by one with hawk-like piercing eyes.

ูก. ุฎูŽุฑูŽุฌู’ุชู ุฃูŽุฌู’ุชุงุฒู ู‚ูŽูู’ุฑุงู‹ ุบูŽูŠุฑูŽ ู…ูุฌู’ุชุงุฒู
ููŽุตุงุฏูŽู†ููŠ ุฃุดู‡ูŽู„ู ุงู„ุนูŽูŠู†ูŽูŠู†ู ูƒุงู„ุจุงุฒู

2. A hawk perched on his wrist, another above saddle,
One above his glove, the other atop his hood.

ูข. ุตูŽู‚ู’ุฑูŒ ุนู„ู‰ ูƒูŽูู‡ู ุตูŽู‚ู’ุฑูŒ ูŠูุคู„ู‘ููู‡ู
ุฐุง ููˆู‚ูŽ ุจูŽุบู’ู„ู ูˆูŽู‡ูŽุฐุง ููŽูˆู‚ูŽ ู‚ููู‘ูŽุงุฒู

3. How many times has his glance made promises,
As though a pledge to be fulfilled without fail.

ูฃ. ูƒู… ู…ูŽูˆุนุฏู ู„ููŠูŽ ู…ูู†ู’ ุฃูŽู„ุญุงุธู ู…ูู‚ู’ู„ูŽุชู‡ู
ู„ูˆ ุฃูŽู†ู‘ูŽู‡ู ู…ูŽูˆู’ุนูุฏูŒ ูŠูู‚ู’ุถู‰ ุจุฅูู†ุฌุงุฒู

4. I weep while his eyes laugh mockingly at me,
My soul is ransom for that smiling mockerโ€™s gaze.

ูค. ุฃูŽุจูƒููŠ ูˆูŽูŠูŽุถู’ุญูŽูƒู ู…ูู†ู‘ููŠ ุทูŽุฑููู‡ู ู‡ูุฒูุกุงู‹
ู†ูŽูู’ุณูŠ ุงู„ููุฏุงุกู ู„ูุฐุงูƒูŽ ุงู„ุถู‘ูŽุงุญูƒู ุงู„ู‡ุงุฒููŠ