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I passed by the early-morning singers, as if

ู…ุฑุฑุช ุจู…ุทุฑุงุจ ุงู„ุบุฏุงุฉ ูƒุฃู†ู‡ุง

1. I passed by the early-morning singers, as if
They learnt with the dawn a fragrant trill,

ูก. ู…ูŽุฑูŽุฑุชู ุจูู…ูุทุฑุงุจู ุงู„ุบูŽุฏุงุฉู ูƒูŽุฃูŽู†ู‘ูŽู‡ุง
ุชูŽุนู„ู ู…ูŽุนูŽ ุงู„ุฅูุดุฑุงู‚ู ุฑุงุญุงู‹ ู…ูููŽู„ููŽู„ุง

2. Speckled like the black partridge, youโ€™d think its hue
Was coloured from a rain cloudโ€™s polished skin.

ูข. ู…ูู†ูŽู…ู‘ูŽุฑูŽุฉูŒ ูƒูŽุฏุฑุงุกู ุชูŽุญุณูŽุจู ู„ูŽูˆู†ูŽู‡ุง
ุชูŽุฌูŽู„ู‘ูŽู„ูŽ ู…ูู† ุฌูู„ุฏู ุงู„ุณูŽุญุงุจูŽุฉู ู…ูŽูุตูู„ุง

3. It seemed to bare its throat-band for my eyes,
And an eyelash fine as a gazelleโ€™s kohlโ€™d rim,

ูฃ. ุจูŽุฏูŽุช ุชูŽุฌุชูŽู„ูŠ ู„ูู„ุนูŽูŠู†ู ุทูŽูˆู‚ุงู‹ ู…ูู…ูŽุณู‘ูŽูƒุงู‹
ูˆูŽุทูŽุฑูุงู‹ ูƒูŽู…ุง ุชูŽุฑู†ูˆ ุงู„ุบูŽุฒุงู„ูŽุฉู ุฃูŽูƒุญูŽู„ุง

4. With a tail both sides the equal that strips bare
A flowering twig or plucks a fruitful stem.

ูค. ู„ูŽู‡ุง ุฐูŽู†ูŽุจูŒ ูˆุงููŠ ุงู„ุฌูŽูˆุงู†ูุจู ู…ูุซู„ูŽ ู…ุง
ุชูู‚ูŽุดู‘ูุฑู ุทูŽู„ุนุงู‹ ุฃูŽูˆ ุชูุฌูŽุฑู‘ูุฏู ู…ูŽู†ุตูู„ุง

5. When it took to the air it left me watching
Its wings beat out a murmur or soft jingle.

ูฅ. ุฅูุฐุง ุญูŽู„ู‘ูŽู‚ูŽุช ููŠ ุงู„ุฌูŽูˆู‘ู ุฎูู„ุชูŽ ุฌูŽู†ุงุญูŽู‡ุง
ูŠูŽุฑูุฏู‘ู ุตูŽููŠุฑุงู‹ ุฃูŽูˆ ูŠูุญูŽุฑู‘ููƒู ุฌูŽู„ุฌูŽู„ุง