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My patience is grieved though it obediently bears

أواحزني عصاني الصبر لكن

1. My patience is grieved though it obediently bears
The tears welling out of my eyes when you are not here

١. أواحَزَني عصاني الصبرُ لكن
دموعُ العين سامعةٌ مُطيعَهْ

2. You were so gentle and sweet but then sadly withdrew
No surprise that a loaned thing returns back to its owner anew

٢. وكنتِ وديعةً ثم استرِدَّت
وليس بمُنكَرٍ ردُّ الوديعَه