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I am smitten with an archer who chose his occupation,

ูุชู†ุช ุจู†ุดุงุจูŠ ุงุฎุชุงุฑ ุดุบู„ู‡

1. I am smitten with an archer who chose his occupation,
With his craft, he frightens onlookersโ€™ eyes.

ูก. ููุชูู†ุชู ุจูู†ูŽุดู‘ุงุจููŠู‘ู ุงุฎุชุงุฑูŽ ุดูุบู„ูŽู‡ู
ุจูุตูŽู†ุนูŽุชูู‡ู ุฎูŽูˆููŽ ุงู„ุนููŠูˆู†ู ุงู„ู†ูŽูˆุงุธูุฑู

2. He prepares for his shooter arrows that send
Anyone hit by one to their grave.

ูข. ุฃูŽุนูŽุฏู‘ูŽ ู„ูุฑุงุฆูŠู‡ู ู†ูŽุดุงุดูŠุจูŽ ู…ูŽู† ูŠูุตูŽุจ
ุจููˆุงุญูุฏูŽุฉู ู…ูู†ู‡ุง ูŠูŽุฑุญ ู„ูู„ู…ูŽู‚ุงุจูุฑู

3. And souls throughout the land are in love with him
Some patiently enduring, others lovesick.

ูฃ. ูˆูŽู‚ูŽุฏ ู†ูŽุดูุจูŽุช ููŠ ุญูุจู‘ูู‡ู ุฃูŽู†ููุณู ุงู„ูˆูŽุฑู‰
ููŽู…ูู† ู…ุงู„ููƒู ูˆูŽุฌุฏุงู‹ ูˆูŽุขุฎุฑ ุตุงุจูุฑู

4. I looked at him as he carved arrows
I was scared it was as if my heart was a flying bird.

ูค. ู†ูŽุธูŽุฑุชู ุฅูู„ูŽูŠู‡ู ูˆูŽู‡ูˆูŽ ูŠูŽู†ุญูŽุชู ุฃูŽุณู‡ูู…ุงู‹
ููŽุฎููุชู ูƒูŽุฃูŽู† ู‚ูŽู„ุจููŠ ู„ูŽู‡ู ู‚ูŽู„ุจู ุทุงุฆูุฑู

5. And I had no strength against the piercing of his arrowsโ€™ heads
So how could I withstand an archer and the arrows he chisels?

ูฅ. ูˆูŽู‚ูŽุฏ ูƒูู†ุชู ู„ุง ุฃูŽู‚ูˆู‰ ู„ูุณูŽู‡ู…ู ู„ูุญุงุธูู‡ู
ููŽูƒูŽูŠููŽ ู„ูู†ูุดู‘ุงุจู ูˆูŽุณูŽู‡ู…ู ุงู„ู…ูŽุญุงุฌูุฑู