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Arrows well-aimed for my shooting,

ุฃุณู‡ุงู… ู…ููˆู‚ุงุช ู„ุฑู…ูŠูŠ

1. Arrows well-aimed for my shooting,
Or polished cups for my drinking,

ูก. ุฃุณูู‡ุงู…ูŒ ู…ูููŽูˆู‘ู‚ุงุชูŒ ู„ุฑู…ู’ูŠููŠ
ุฃู… ู‚ูุฏุงุญูŒ ู…ููˆู‘ูŽู‚ุงุช ู„ุถุฑุจูŠ

2. All finding their mark, yet lacking zeal,
Alas my heart, what does my heart prepare?

ูข. ุตุงุฆุจุงุชูŒ ุฌู…ูŠุนูู‡ูŽุง ูุงุชุฑุงุชูŒ
ูˆูŽูŠู’ุญูŽ ู‚ู„ุจูŠ ู…ุงุฐุง ูŠูุนูุฏู‘ ู„ู‚ู„ุจูŠ

3. Those eyes which failed me,
In longing for them, the herdโ€™s weaklings,

ูฃ. ุชู„ูƒู…ู ุงู„ุฃุนูŠู†ู ุงู„ุชูŠ ุฎุฐู„ูŽุชู†ูŠ
ููŠ ุงู„ุชุตุงุจูŠ ุจู‡ุง ุฎูˆุงุฐู„ู ุณูŽุฑุจู

4. Lady of the veil, in which she shelters
The rose of her cheek, a scorpion with a sting,

ูค. ุฑูŽุจู‘ุฉูŽ ุงู„ุจูุฑู’ู‚ูุนู ุงู„ู‘ูŽุชูŠ ููŠู‡ ุชูŽุญู…ูŠ
ูˆุฑุฏุฉูŽ ุงู„ุฎุฏู‘ ุนู‚ุฑุจูŒ ุฐุงุชู ู„ุณุจู

5. You have sweetened suffering for me, so itโ€™s sweet
With fresh water from your sweet lips.

ูฅ. ู‚ุฏ ู…ุฒูŽุฌู’ุชู ุงู„ุนุฐุงุจูŽ ู„ูŠ ูู‡ูˆ ุนุฐุจูŒ
ุจุฒู„ุงู„ู ู…ู† ู…ุงุก ุซุบุฑููƒู ุนูŽุฐู’ุจู